A series of essays based on "Characters of "Moving China"" (1)
[Title]
The "2007 Touching China Special Award" was awarded to China Aerospace Science and Technology Corporation's "Chang'e-1" research and development team. Yan Su, a committee member of the Moved China Selection Committee, commented on the team: "I respect them the most, they have created earth-shattering achievements/I love them the most, their average age is less than 30 years old/The waves behind the river push the waves ahead,/The new Toyota models catch up with the old ones./Good The sun and the moon, the rise and revitalization of a good society/depend on this new generation."
Please write an article with the title "Youth".
[Requirements] ① Make your own decision. ②Except for poetry, there is no restriction on the style of writing. ③No less than 800 words.
[Guidance]
The reference idea of ??this question: "Youth" does not represent years, vulgarity is not welcome, there is no need for pessimism, and we must never give up our ideals; youthful ambitions should be taken into account; young people are to be feared; people To stay young forever, you can only have a firm will, be optimistic, keep pursuing, and so on.
If candidates choose to write an argumentative essay and think from the perspective of "Why should we maintain a young mentality", the sub-points that can be established are: 1. Youth is a kind of vitality, which can make us full of love for life. ; 2. Youth is a kind of passion, which helps us turn our love into the excitement of life; 3. Having a young mentality allows us to enjoy life better; having a young mentality also brings happiness in life. ...and then diverging from the perspective of "how to maintain a young mentality", we can extract arguments such as "always maintain curiosity about things and love for others" and "boldly try new methods and explore the unknown world".
[Excellent work]
Young
Zhou Yang, Taicang Senior High School, Jiangsu Province
“The old man is in trouble, and his ambition is a thousand miles; the martyr is in his old age, and he has a strong ambition. "This is a famous line from Cao Gong's "The Turtle is Longevity". I always like to read it. Sometimes it reads a broad and heroic mind, sometimes it reads fearlessness and even contempt for death, and sometimes it reads "Who can The stubbornness of "asking, "Lian Po is old, can he still make a living?" Sometimes it also reads out an optimistic attitude of eternal youth. (The opening chapter interprets the famous lines in "The Turtle Lives Longevity" in many aspects, and highlights the topic by "reading an optimistic attitude of eternal youth".)
People should live vigorously; heroes should even more Never say old, never say never. Cao Cao, the great general, learned the hard way after losing his son in Wancheng; the Han prime minister laughed at Zhou Yu and Zhuge Liang three times when he defeated Huarong; the Wei king cleverly used counter-intuitive tactics after cutting off his beard and abandoning his robe... Despite repeated setbacks, he never gave up his ambition to dominate the world, even though he suffered a lot of infamy behind him. Unlike Liu Bei, who was burned by Lu Xun for 700 miles and burned back to Baidi City, and never got sick again; nor was he like Sun Quan, who guarded his father and brother's inheritance, captured Jingzhou, and then went south to proclaim himself emperor. (It fully demonstrates the familiarity with Cao Cao's life and deeds; comparing Cao Cao with Liu and Sun is a wonderful work.)
Aspiration does not depend on age. As long as you have ambition, you will always be young. ("Aspirations do not lie in age" means that young people can also create achievements, but it is not appropriate to quote here.) After Wu Zetian became emperor, even though she was over seventy years old, it is said that her eyebrows grew again, and the hair appeared again in her gray hair. A few strands of black hair. Her love for life and her desire for peace and order are so powerful!
I like the excitement of Mao Zedong's "Confidence that if you live two hundred years, you will be like water hitting three thousand miles", and I also appreciate the "I really want to live another five hundred years" in the theme song of "Kangxi Dynasty" of pride. ("I like...and appreciate..." It's good to incorporate emotions into the text.) In this world, no one will grow old or die, but as long as there is enthusiasm, it will be fine. Therefore, I deeply regret the absurdity of Emperor Wen of the Han Dynasty who "didn't ask about the common people but ghosts and gods", and I hate the decadence of Jia Jing in "A Dream of Red Mansions" who prayed to gods to make elixirs. At the same time, I don’t agree with being young and energetic, blindly fighting for a certain ambition regardless of anything, so I feel worthless for the short-suffering hero who said, “The Huns are not destroyed, why should we take care of our family?” It is a pity for the young man who lives in the wolf's home and hastily visited the north."
When you are physically young, it is better to be more mature; when you are physically old, you should still keep a young heart. (The contrast highlights the insights.)
Then I thought of those writers again. Some people have been dealing with pens all their lives and have never stopped writing, such as Lu Xun, Ba Jin, Balzac, etc. They have left immortal works for mankind, and they are forever young. Some people wrote one or two masterpieces that caused a sensation in the literary world and then "washed their hands". Although they may have been affected by the social environment, they have lost their creative potential and their mentality has aged, which is a pity. Because our expectations for more and better works have been dashed. (For the "some people" in the negative examples, if you can name them, the authenticity and intensity can be strengthened.)
Only when you are always young will your life continue to shine and shine. There is a reason to continue. Once a person's heart grows old, it means that "life" is about to end. What a sad scene it is!
All seasons are like spring——
This is the highest realm of life. (The ending words are concise and meaningful.)
[Comments]
This article is a type one paper, with a score of 57 points.
This is an excellent article that is relevant to the topic and highly contagious. The author closely sticks to the theme of "forever young", cites sufficient arguments, and skillfully uses pros and cons contrastive arguments to analyze and reason. The reading is well-founded and friendly and natural. In addition, the choice of words and sentences also has a certain degree of expressiveness.
A composition series based on "Characters of "Moving China"" (2)
[Title]
Read the following text and compose as required.
"Moving China" selection committee member Chen Zhangliang wrote this when recommending Qian Xuesen: "He not only made outstanding contributions to the progress of mankind in the aerospace field with his rigorous and diligent scientific attitude, but also The indifference to fame and fortune and the straightforward attitude towards life explain the personality essence of a scientist. "Yes, in the heart of Qian Xuesen, the "backbone of the nation", "the country is more important than family. Science is the most important and fame and wealth are the least."
Please write an article on the topic of "Being Kind to Fame and Fortune". You must decide your own idea, choose your own style of writing except poetry, and draft your own title, no less than 800 words.
[Guidance]
If you choose to write an argumentative essay on this topic, you should generally use a dialectical perspective to analyze it appropriately and not be one-sided or absolute. Of course, this question should be written with new ideas and personality, and you can also use your brains in the choice of style and writing method. For example, boldly imagine and let "fame and fortune" write a letter to the owner to explain the rich connotation of the topic; or make "fame and fortune" a virtual defendant and write a "spiritual trial"... both can give people a refreshing feeling.
The title of the essay can and should be more lively. For example: 1. It’s all the fault of fame and fortune 2. Real water has no fragrance 3. I love “you” without any negotiation? 4. Fame and fortune, it’s not easy to say I love you. 5. Exclusive interview with fame and fortune.
[Excellent work]
Laughing about fame and fortune
Zhao Beibei, Taicang Senior High School, Jiangsu Province
During the Spring Festival, I saw such an article in the newspaper Report - The famous female singer xx went to Shanghai to perform, and the performance started on time. However, when the star was about to go on stage, she suddenly asked the organizers to increase the price. When the other party heard this, blood rushed to his forehead: "Isn't this a rip-off? No way!" "Then I won't sing!"... So the two sides were in a stalemate, but the audience was left waiting in the stands, waiting for the female singer to appear. , they roared, cursed, whistled, stamped their feet, smashed chairs...
Close the newspaper, I couldn't help but sigh: There are many people nowadays who always value fame and fortune more than anything else, and People often want to use "fame" to gain "profit". This kind of situation is not uncommon not only in the literary and artistic circles, but also in the scientific circles. Isn’t it commonplace that scientists today go to court for fame and fortune? Compared with R?ntgen's era, one can't help but feel that "the days of philosophers are far away, but the models are still in the past."
However, not all scientists care so much about "profit".
At a time when science is increasingly linked to business, British man Stephen Hawking said in an article in memory of the physicist Dirac that if Dirac had patented the electron relativity equation he discovered, he would have become the richest man in the world. One of the people - all the companies that make televisions and computers have to pay him. Qian Xuesen and Min Enze, the "2007 "Touching China" figures", both gave up the superior scientific research and living conditions abroad in the 1950s and resolutely returned to their motherland. They are patriotic and determined to serve their country. They are indifferent to fame and fortune and regard serving the country as their lifelong pursuit.
When talking about "fame" and "profit", we can't help but think of the old naughty boy Zhou Botong in Jin Yong's works. On the top of Mount Huashan, he was extremely happy to recommend heroes from all walks of life as heroes of the world, but he did not think of himself. No wonder Huang Yaoshi sighed: "I regard fame and fortune as dung, and Master Yideng regards fame and fortune as floating clouds, but they are not as good as Zhou Botong - he has no fame and fortune in his heart!"
Throughout the ages, how many people have pursued it all their lives? Isn’t it just “fame and fortune”? However, not everyone can have these four words. The ones who really have them are those runners who are not bound by these four words. They often take fame and fortune very lightly, and believe that concentrating on their favorite career is the greatest joy in the world. Just like the "Test Pilot King" Huang Bingxin said: "If you run with the gold brick of fame and fortune hanging around your neck, you will be exhausted!"
In fact, everyone is the same, they all want to achieve career (academic) success success. But on the journey to success, you must not fall into the trap of fame and fortune. Otherwise, not only will your intelligence deteriorate and your talents and ideas dry up, but you will also follow the saying of your ancestors - "The higher you climb, the harder you fall." In the end, you will even lose everything you have gained!
[Comments]
This is a wonderful argumentative essay with a prose flavor. The author sticks closely to the topic and extends the view that "concentrating on the career you love is the greatest joy in the world", which can arouse the readers' sympathy.
The article talks about the past and the present, with rich materials and sophisticated writing, showing a broad reading range and solid language skills.
Composition series (3) based on "Characters of "Moving China""
[Title]
Read the following text and compose according to the requirements.
A rich man asked a philosopher why many people disliked him after he became rich. The philosopher took him to the window and said, "Look outside, what do you see?" The rich man said, "I see many people outside." The philosopher took him to the mirror and asked, "Now What did you see again?" The rich man replied: "Myself." The philosopher smiled and said, "The window and the mirror are both made of glass. The only difference is that the mirror has a thin layer of silver. But that's why. Silver means that you can only see yourself and not see others."
Please use "seeing yourself and seeing others" as the topic, decide your own idea, choose your own style, and write your own title. An article of no less than 800 words. What you write must be within the scope of the topic.
[Guidance]
"Seeing yourself and seeing others" is a relational topic. The purpose of the question is to inspire candidates to pay attention to others and not only care about themselves because of certain interests. Inconsiderate of others. The topic shows special care for young people who are in the growth and transformation period, at the crossroads of world outlook and life choices, and strives to transform this care into self-reflection and self-understanding of young people.
The writing scope of this question is relatively wide, and there are many genre choices. So, where can we start from? First, from the perspective of narrative style, you can narrate a story about how you treated yourself and others, such as a reflection on your past self-centeredness and inconsideration of others; you can also tell a story about the process of being considerate and caring for others. Stories of happiness, etc. Second, it is conceived from an argumentative perspective, which can explain how one should treat oneself, how one should treat others, etc. Thirdly, there is a wide range in the choice of content. You can write about caring for the world and calling out true feelings, you can write about caring for family and expressing your true feelings, you can also write about caring for the weak and showing kindness; you can also write about listening to others, approaching others, helping others, etc. Cut to the topic from an angle.
In short, when writing, you should choose materials that can move yourself and others. You can organically combine narrative, description, discussion, lyricism and other expression methods, so that you can write a masterpiece that is both emotional and emotional.
[Excellent Work]
The Stage of the Heart
Everyone has a stage in their heart. The stage is as big as the heart is.
——Inscription
Perhaps, you just enjoy the love and care of your parents as a matter of course, but you have never noticed the increasingly gray hair on their temples;
Perhaps, you just use your wisdom to attack your opponents in the market until they are embarrassed or even bankrupt. At this time, you will say "this is competition", but have you ever thought that this will attract more "eyes on you" ;
Perhaps, you just cheated and deceived for some petty profits. In the end, everyone betrayed you, but you happily indulged in the "trophies" you painstakingly earned;
Maybe...
Perhaps, you have always been a solo dancer on the stage of the heart.
The universe exploded from tiny particles. From then on, a beautiful earth appeared in the vast sky. Human beings appeared and multiplied. They gradually developed from the era of eating hair and drinking blood, forming a society and possessing civilization.
The "individual" nature of a person determines that it is difficult for him not to pretend to be himself and only see others, and he will also have selfish desires. However, things often have a "degree". People always live in groups. If they only have eyes for themselves and do not leave a place for others, then they will always live in "self" until they die alone. The ancient emperors had exclusive power in one body. However, if he did not have the courage to "accommodate all rivers and be tolerant, he is great" and if he did not keep the common people in his heart, then he would probably be a "boat that capsized". This is even more true for us modern humans. After all, we don’t have the power to respond to everything. We always have to live among the crowd. We always hope to be cared for by others. So, don’t be the solo dancer. See others while seeing yourself.
According to media reports, Wu Honglie and Chung Chi-wing, the legendary couple in Hong Kong’s education sector, are both 89 years old. In their youth, they were young talents in the judicial and diplomatic circles of the Republic of China. After returning to Hong Kong in 1953, they have been practicing lawyers. Feeling that many young people had no money to go to college, they funded the establishment of Shue Yan College in 1971, sacrificing their youth and health and cultivating tens of thousands of talents for Hong Kong society. For 35 years, the Hu couple have worked hard for the school. Hu Honglie did not hesitate to return to work in a law firm in his twilight years to earn construction fees for the school building. It is precisely because they saw the hardships of poor students and cared deeply about education that they abandoned their families and careers and donated their life savings, estimated at at least 400 to 500 million yuan, to make Shue Yan College a standing monument that will forever move China.
Looking back while leaning on the railing, it doesn’t matter what we have paid for, what we have given away, what we have gained. As long as we have others in our hearts, we will have no regrets; leaning on the railing, we will see what we will do. It doesn't matter what you get, what you see in your eyes, or what you hide in your heart. As long as you see yourself and others, you will be free from guilt.
Everyone has a stage in their heart. The dancers on it must see how big the stage is; and how big the stage is depends on how big your heart is!
[Comments]
This candidate used the title "Everyone has a stage in their heart. As big as the heart is, the stage is as big as the stage", which clearly revealed the theme. Easy for readers to grasp quickly.
The "heart" in the article refers to the "mind", that is, "seeing yourself and others." The author starts from how he views his parents, lists various phenomena in daily life and the historical lessons of ancient emperors, and says, "If you only have eyes for yourself and don't leave a place for others, then you will always live in the world." The principle of "self-centeredness" is then analyzed from a positive perspective based on the case of Wu Honglie and his wife, the founders of Hong Kong Shue Yan College.
The sentence structure at the end is neat and the ending is strong.
Examples of the multi-angle use of "Moving Chinese Characters" materials
When it comes to composing, many students always feel that there are no suitable materials at hand, and often "it is difficult for a clever woman to make a meal without rice" feeling. In fact, a very important reason is that I am not good at analyzing materials from multiple angles, identifying the effective points of convergence between materials and themes, and using one material for multiple purposes. A piece of material, depending on the choice and tailoring, can often illustrate more than one issue. Usually, as long as we dig more, organize well, and answer questions cleverly, we will be able to use the materials with ease and ease.
Because of its typicality and sense of the times, "Moving Chinese Characters" is a composition material often chosen by college entrance examination candidates every year. Many compositions have reached the level of "fresh material" in terms of development level by using the material of "touching Chinese characters", which adds to the highlights of the article. The following only takes the use of the "Tai Lihua" material in the "Moving Chinese Figures in 2005" in the 2006 college entrance examination composition as an example to briefly analyze the multi-angle use of the material.
Example 1: Only when people are energetic can they not be overwhelmed. The hammer never bends, the pursuit never fades, and the will never fades. Do you still remember the kind and loving Thousand-Armed Guanyin on the stage? Although Tai Lihua is deaf and mute, she is energetic. Her arms were bruised and swollen from practicing, and the soles of her feet were bruised and blistered. She kept practicing. In the end, she used her fingers to outline the beauty of human nature and used her dance to interpret the true meaning of life. It touches you and me, and China. Without spirit, how could she reach the peak of art from the bottom of misfortune? ——The 2006 Hunan Volume Full Score Essay "Talking About Spirits"
Tai Lihua is a deaf-mute, but she did not complain about the injustice of her fate. Instead, she overcame her disability and trained tenaciously, and finally used her wonderful dance postures Perform a wonderful life and interpret the true meaning of life. This process reflects Tai Lihua's strong will and fearless spirit. It was through the understanding and feeling of the material that the author of the article "Talk about Yiqi" discovered Tai Lihua's "willful spirit (will and spirit)" spiritual quality, and thus found the point of convergence with the theme of the article. In the writing, the paragraphs closely follow the topic of "spirit", narrate, analyze and comment on the material through both positive and negative aspects, and use the presentation of characters' deeds and reasonable speculations to effectively demonstrate that "only when people have spirit can they not be overwhelmed." "The hammer never bends, the pursuit never fades, the will never fades." This view, coupled with the clear title, achieves an effective connection between the material and the theme.
Example 2: ...I really understood the word "tenacity" in a weak and beautiful woman. She, Tai Lihua, although she lives in a silent world, she always smiles, like a fairy who accidentally fell into the world. In her eyes, I couldn't see any pain or complaint, only perseverance. Tai Lihua once wrote an extremely simple text: "In fact, everyone's life is the same, full and empty, full and empty. We should look more at the perfection of life, and then go there with a happy and grateful heart. Facing the dissatisfaction of life, you will be much happier." Reading her life, I read about perseverance. ——The full-mark essay "Jingwei Life" in the Anhui examination in 2006
The Anhui examination examines essays with the topic of "reading". The author puts the content of "reading" on life and selects the indispensable and important things in life. The missing quality - tenacity and so on to establish the intention. From the perspective that Tai Lihua is physically disabled but has a strong will, she faces life with a positive and optimistic attitude, shows the vitality of life in silent places, and creates the glory of life and career, we can explore Tai Lihua's "tough" character trait , the passage is organized and analyzed around the center of "reading perseverance", and a passage of Tai Lihua's text is quoted to enhance the authenticity and strength of the argument. In this way, it not only achieves the topic but also achieves the effect of connecting the material and the theme.
Example 3: Let us turn our attention to the scene of the 2005 Spring Festival Gala. A group of beautiful girls conquered all the audiences with their graceful dancing. "Thousand-Hand Guanyin" makes every Chinese remember her name. Did you know that these young girls grew up in a silent world?
Yes, God made them lose their voices, but they used beautiful body language to tell people: In this world, as long as you find your position, you will succeed! ——The 2006 National Paper full score essay "Finding the Position in Life"
Based on a comprehensive understanding of the composition materials, the author chose to take the perspective of a shepherd: everyone must find their own position. In the sea of ??life, please position yourself accurately. Combined with the understanding and extension of the sentence "using disability to create a special kind of beauty" in the evaluation of Tai Lihua by the "Moving Chinese Figures in 2005" jury, the material is narrated and analyzed according to the theme of the article: "...God made them lose With your voice...as long as you find your position, you will succeed!" The transformation of angles, flexible organization, clever points, and narration integrate the material and the truth into one, It also harmoniously connects the material with the topic of the article.
Example 4: Who is dancing solo with the soul on the stage, and who is showing the vitality of life in silence? Life is like a glass of water. It is light. You have to be humble and proud. You do not care about happiness. You go and carve the angel in your heart - Thousand-Hand Guanyin. You are the most beautiful in my heart!
Tai Lihua, you silently show the vitality of life. The flowers blooming from your "flowering crotch" are so delicate and touching. You must have an angel carved by yourself in your heart, an angel that makes the Chinese people today. An angel moved to tears. ——The 2006 Guangdong paper full score essay "An Angel in the Heart, a Poetic Life"
The article focuses on the theme of "Chasing your dreams with heart and carving the angel in your heart with faith", and selected Tai Lihua as the essay The material shows her angelic strong heart. The paragraph begins with two questions, which introduce the subject of the writing material, Tai Lihua. From the perspective of "carving the angel in your heart", with the help of appropriate and reasonable imagination and speculation: "You must have the angel you have carved in your heart." Make the material show new ideas and meet the requirements of key points.
The above four examples all use the same material, but the angles of application are different, and the materials are organized and analyzed differently to serve different themes. To truly use one material for multiple purposes, first of all, you must have a comprehensive familiarity, interpretation and understanding of the original material, and even innovate, and dig out as much of the connotation of the material as possible. The introduction of Tai Lihua, the judges' remarks and the award speech in "05 Touching Chinese Figures" are less than 400 words, but they are concise and meaningful. Different connotations can be interpreted from different angles. For example, in the above four examples of "spirit", "perseverance", "life positioning" and "carving the angel in your heart", you can also dig out topics such as "optimism", "overcoming difficulties", "adversity and success", "flaws and perfection" , "eternal", "miracle", "fate is in your own hands", "beautiful" and other connotations. Secondly, you must have a comprehensive and accurate understanding of the topic, proposition, and material composition you are writing, have a clear and in-depth grasp of the theme of the article, and find the point of convergence between the material and the theme. Keep close to the meaning of the question, focus on the theme, and use various methods to describe and analyze the material according to different presentation angles and emphases. It can be extended from the keywords or key sentences in the original material, and enrich the material with the help of reasonable imagination and association; it can directly use the relevant content in the original material and add your own interpretation and perception; there is conscious thought in the writing. Be aware of the questions, rather than copying all the original materials and labeling them with questions.
The multi-angle use of materials is a planned and premeditated application technique. As long as you pay attention to the training of material use, understand and master the multi-purpose skills of one material, won't the materials be doubled? There is no need to worry about "out of rice" when composing.