There are many mistakes ~ but in order to respect your original intention, I didn't change the content for you, just corrected the grammar and logic mistakes.
Also, I feel that the one who deleted your article is so cruel. . . In short, the grammar is almost the same ~ ~
1. The local dog attacked the duckling, and the little girl was lovelorn.
Both local and little should use the article a, duck should also use a instead of the, breath is an adjective and should use was.
2. A duckling was attacked by Jackie, a local dog, and died soon. This duckling belongs to a local girl named Adeline.
Jackie should have a named in front of her, which is too wordy. A duck thought to be a local girl Adeline was attacked by a local dog named Jackie.
She loves this duckling so much that she spends most of her time with it.
Had has been removed. It only describes the past, not the past perfect tense. The whole article is in the past tense, and love and belonging seem to be wrong.
Therefore, she named the duckling PLT, which stands for "precious little baby".
Stand changed to stand, which is a non-predicate verb.
Unfortunately, this duckling was killed by Jackie the dog.
Put the dog in front of it and Jackie remove it.
6. But this is not all; Adeline's father caused PLT's death because he wanted to test the dog's obedience.
This sentence is incorrect, and it is better to change it to PLT's death because Adeline's father just wanted to test the dog's obedience.
7. After the innocent duckling was killed, the little girl Adeline was heartbroken. She helped PLT and her third brother Gregory hold the funeral.
Innocence was replaced by poverty, the little girl was deleted, and later it was changed to Adeline, who was broken to hear and held an interesting PLT with her third brother Gregory.
Since this incident, we have conducted a series of surveys on 20 pedestrians.
Have it, get rid of it
9.96% of pedestrians said that it was his father's fault. He should have known what would happen before he acted, and he should have cared about Adeline's feelings.
It is wrong to be Adeline's father, because he should consider what will happen before doing it, and he should care about Adeline's feelings.
10。 Because this is a great success for children of Adeline's age.
Change like to in.
1 1。 If animals wake up, then they have it from the outside, and they will try to attack or demonstrate animals to show their status.
Apart from and, in fact, I don't quite understand the meaning of this sentence. The logic is a bit confusing. Tell me what you want to express and I'll help you correct it.
12. In this activity, we also interviewed our third brother Gregory.
Third brother, get rid of it. It's a little wordy.
Because he attended PLT's funeral.
This sentence and the last sentence do not constitute cause and effect, so remove the reason.
14. He mentioned his sympathy for Adeline, who cried badly at the funeral.
Together with the previous sentence, this sentence was changed to that he attended PLT's funeral and expressed sympathy for Adeline because she cried badly at the funeral.
15. He thinks it is one of his shortcomings, because he accidentally picked out PLT from seven ducklings.
It's better to change it to Gregory's opinion that he is also at fault, because he accidentally picked out PLT from the seven ducklings.