With you, my world is colorful.
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Childhood nanny
"Wow, it smells good!" When I came home from school, I smelled fried chicken as soon as I entered the room. Sure enough, there is a bowl of Huang Chengcheng and crispy fried chicken wings on the table! I couldn't help running over, stretching Wuzhishan, picking up a chicken wing and eating it. My mother who came out of the kitchen was really angry and funny when she saw me greedy. Tell me to wash my hands at once. When she saw that my fingernails were getting old, she couldn't help but blame: "I'm ten years old and I still don't pay attention to hygiene." Cut off my nails quickly! " After dinner, I stretched myself, sat on the sofa, held out my hand and asked, "Mom, you cut my nails." My mother scolded me reluctantly, but in action, she sat down and began to cut my nails. "Mom, sharpen my nails again." I just solved the "hand project", and I put my foot on her lap again. No way, get rid of these smelly feet together, this boy! I secretly laughed at the knife mouth in my heart, and tofu heart's mother must be whispering in my heart. Oh, mom-my dear nanny, it's so comfortable to be with you!
Friends on earth
"Elder sister, don't move! Want money or die? " I have a towel on my head, a bath towel on my body, a submachine gun on my shoulder, and an AK-47 rifle to "hold" my mother. I don't know if my mother wants money. She would rather put it on my gun than take out a penny! I can't do it, so I have to be defeated, depressed! One day, I will put some gel and hair gel on my hair that has been left for many days to give it an explosion. In front of my mother, I squinted and hummed a room full of "chrysanthemum dregs, which hurt all over the floor", and I felt very "Jay Chou"! But my mother looked at me coldly for a long time, rewarded me with a punch and threw out a sentence: "Little brother, you are at the wrong door. This is not Zhou Fu, and I am not Jay Chou's mother! " Can't help but spit! Alas, alas, alas, mother, my lovely friend, I am so happy with you!
My college teacher.
"A, come and look at the Happy Dictionary!" I was thinking about the six-sided Rubik's cube in my room, and my mother called me in the living room. She wants to test me as a scholar. On TV, Wang's question is really strange, such as "Where does the Yangtze River originate-Kunlun Mountain and Mountain?" I beat you to it, Tanggula Mountain! Mom is expressionless; "Which of the following energy sources is non-renewable-water, wind and oil?" I said airily, "Oil!" My mother smiled out of the corner of her eye, and I became more and more proud, but this question: "Who said this sentence:' Look at the sages of the past, be frugal and extravagant'?" -Zhang Qian, Zhang Qian, Sima Qian, Sima Guang "I won't. I glanced at my mother out of the corner of my eye, and she had already thrown out the answer with confidence: "Sima Guang". The old man on TV chose Sima Qian, but my mother was worried to death. Fortunately, Wang put water in it, and the old man passed the test, so my mother was relieved! Oh, oh, my mother, my dear teacher, can really learn knowledge with you!
Mom, I really like being with you. You accompany me in this life, and I will accompany you.
Just give this document to my lovely and respectable mother.
-P.S.
Comments by famous teachers:
The little author of this masterpiece in the examination room has the magic power to turn decay into magic, and wrote this masterpiece with rich life atmosphere, sincere feelings and humor, which is commendable.
First, the characters are affable and reasonable. If the average student's composition expresses his mother's performance, the selection of materials is nothing more than sending an umbrella in rainy days, sending him to the hospital in the middle of the night when he is sick, encouraging himself when he fails, and so on. , familiar, cliche, nothing new. The little author of this paper not only depicts the gentle mother image, but also shows the knowledgeable and naughty mother image, showing us a unique new model of mother in the new era.
Second, the mother-child relationship is novel and unique. The article not only depicts the image of mother, but also fully shows the naughty, lovely and intimate relationship between the author and mother. The article presents us with a brand-new mother-child relationship, which is both a mother, a teacher and a friend. It is an unusual mother to have such a naughty son.
Third, the article takes advantage of the situation skillfully and has a unique idea. The little author first notes the topic with the title and quotes the whole article. Then it is divided into three sections, using the titles of Gorky's autobiographical trilogy "Childhood", "On Earth" and "My University" to explain the passage of time and the process of growth, fully show the different roles of mothers and describe the unique feelings of being with their mothers. At the end of each paragraph, there are natural topics with distinct levels. The last postscript echoes the inscription, expressing endless love for mother and deepening the center.
In addition, the language of the article is humorous and full of life, which makes people laugh.
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Full score composition 2:
together with you
I want to be with you.
I was so naive that I thought I could feel your infinite warmth around you and get a little light from you-you are a brilliant sun, and I am just a trivial drop of water! However, when I really walked into you, I found that I was out of my depth! Your brilliant light is too dazzling, your passionate flame is too burning, and your great momentum is too grand, so I can't get close to you.
However, you attract me like a magnet, trying to escape, but irresistible. In this way, I left my home, the ocean, which loves me and tolerates me, and flew to you without hesitation. Although, there will be danger of rolling in the deep at any time, there will be fear of death at any time, and there will be disasters that will be scattered at any time; Although I miss my hometown all the time and the people I love all the time, as long as I hear your call, see your smiling face and smell your smell, I will rush to your side regardless, and I want to be with you!
My family is calling my name, and the tears of missing make the ocean wider. But I smiled and shook my head, and my body floated up; The wind stopped me from flying to you, and the strong wind made me stagger, but I smiled and shook my head, still rising and rising; The cloud told me that the future is dangerous, and approaching you will be beyond redemption, but I still shook my head and resolutely moved on.
Finally, I came to your side, dizzy, before I could say a word to you, before I could look at you, before I could smile with you, I was burned by a blazing light, and my body made of water disappeared like a shadow in an instant, leaving you forever!
Buddha said that looking back 500 times in the past life has brought me a brush in this life, and the thousand-year practice has brought me the fate of being in the same boat with you. I'm willing to pass by 10 thousand times in this life for a second with you!
However, I can't even be with you for a second. What's the point of my pursuit? My fiery heart gradually cooled down. Although my body had already been torn and turned into clouds and dust, I kept searching, repaired my broken body and healed my injured heart on the way down the sun. I began to recover my original appearance, and I found the direction to go home!
Waves burst, that's my mother's call, ah, the blue sea is in front of me, and I plunged into the arms of my family!
Comments by famous teachers:
In many articles that write people's notes, I can't help but marvel at such a unique masterpiece.
First, the article is based on reasoning and enlightens life. The author chooses one of the most common natural phenomena in nature-the process of transpiration, sublimation and cooling of water, and shows this process as a woman's passionate pursuit of men and the process of returning home after waking up. It is of vivid educational significance for junior middle school students who are still young to reason with stories and be ingenious.
Second, the article is full of passion and strong appeal. In this paper, a long section of pen and ink is used to describe the passionate pursuit of the sun by water droplets, which conforms to the psychological characteristics of young students' pursuit of so-called love and often forms a strong * * * sound.
In addition, the article thinks rationally and returns to nature. Without the last two paragraphs, such an article seems to be a declaration of love for young men and women, not a romance novel. Together with the last two paragraphs, the article has the depth and thickness of thought, showing the author's keen and sophisticated vision-puppy love will not have any good results, but a moth will put out the fire and bring about its own destruction. It is better to wake up as soon as possible and return to a normal life track.
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Full score composition 3:
Be with the motherland
Dear students:
Hello everyone!
The topic of my speech today is "Being with the Motherland"!
I remember the philosopher Liang Qichao once said: "The wisdom of teenagers is in China, and the strength of teenagers is in China!" Sixteen-and seventeen-year-olds are the future and hope of the motherland! Each of our classmates should be concerned about the motherland and study hard for its prosperity.
The Chinese nation is the oldest nation in the world. It has a long history of five thousand years. It has created a splendid civilization for 5,000 years, and has experienced one trauma after another for 5,000 years! Do you know why our nation can survive and have strong vitality? It's our people and our motherland!
Throughout the ages, many people with lofty ideals have died for their country at a critical juncture of the motherland. "If you die in a national disaster, you will die." It is Cao Zhi's generous elegy; "Every man is responsible for the rise and fall of the world." It is a good word for Gu; "Selfishness is the life and death of the country, and it is avoided because of disasters." It is Lin Zexu's clank oath; "I laugh at the sky with a horizontal knife, and I will stay with my courage!" It is Tan Sitong's tragic choice. Why can they face life and death so righteously? Is the motherland in their hearts, they are with the motherland, and the people of the motherland will always remember him!
Throughout the ages, how many sages gave up everything, worked hard and made positive progress in order to revitalize the motherland and benefit the people. The story of hanging beams and stabbing stocks, catching fireflies and reflecting snow, is well known to all women and children. Su Qin eventually became a great scholar. He said that the six countries resisted Qin in order to save all countries from being annexed by Qin. When Zhou Enlai teenagers were studying, they made an oath of "studying for the rise of China" and tried to practice it. Qian Xuesen is overseas, with excellent study, successful career and excellent life. However, when the news of the founding of New China came, he was extremely surprised, broke through many obstacles and finally returned to the motherland! He made an immortal contribution to the space industry in New China. Why are they so diligent and successful? It is their pure heart for the motherland, they are with the motherland, and the people of the motherland will always remember him!
However, looking at the present, some phenomena among our young classmates are very heartbreaking! Some middle school students, who are in their prime, wear strange clothes and have unique hairstyles. Sometimes they export dirty clothes and sometimes they secretly "smoke". Some are addicted to online games, and some are immersed in the world of romantic magic novels ... I wonder if they have ideals and beliefs in their hearts. Can you have relatives and your motherland? Their lives are as empty as morning mist and as pale as white paper! Such people will not only make no contribution to the motherland, but also become a burden to the family and the social state.
There are others, they are another kind of people-"pro-Japanese faction" and "Hahan faction". They mentioned Japanese anime, such as Cherry Maruko, Crayon Shinchan, Slam Dunk Master, Tennis Prince and so on. They talk about Korean stars, they talk about "Kim Hee Seon", "Quan Xiangyu" and "TVXQ!!" And "Ann". But if you ask him about the "Wang Meng" group and the school of bold words, he will be flushed and confused. As for function formula, ohm's law and periodic table of elements, how can you remember a few! Can such people be regarded as middle school students and the future of our motherland? If this continues, the family will not be a family, and the country will not be a country!
Of course, most of us here are working hard against the clock, but everyone's motivation is different. Maybe we can create a bright future for ourselves and win glory for our families, but we should take "self" as the starting point and "family" as the basis, set up lofty ideals and study hard for our motherland.
Let's remember the motherland, study hard and serve the motherland! The motherland will always be with you, and our tomorrow will be better!
My speech is over, thank you!
Comments by famous teachers:
The topic of this excellent examination room is very atmospheric, and in the form of a speech, the perfect combination of content and form is completely achieved.
First, the scenery is clear and magnificent. At the beginning of the article, Liang Qichao's famous saying "Young people are wise, China is wise, young people are strong, and China is strong" puts forward the central argument that "every student should cherish the motherland and study hard for its prosperity". Very convincing. This is a concrete extension of the topic, straight to the point, clear-cut, and hit the nail on the head.
Second, borrow from others and fully demonstrate. The article puts forward facts, makes sense, or quotes famous sayings, or quotes poems, or lists examples, or expounds the negative side, fully demonstrates the sub-argument, and effectively proves the argument.
Third, passionate words are inspiring. The language of the article is impassioned, like a raging river thousands of miles away. The use of parallelism is full of momentum; The quotations of ancient poems and famous sayings are persuasive; There is no doubt that rhetorical questions set suspense. All these show the young author's superb skills in mastering language and writing.
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Full score composition 4:
With you
Your figure often appears in my dreams, your voice lingers in my ears, and your outline flashes before my eyes. Who are you? I really want to be with you!
I met you repeatedly in my dreams, as if an invisible force pushed me closer to you, trying to see you carefully in the dark, but I couldn't see anything clearly, only a pair of gentle, loving or stern eyes flashed in front of me. Close to you, my cold heart will be warm, my depressed heart will be cheerful, and my wandering heart will be firm. That feeling is really wonderful!
I've been chasing you, trying to catch you and want to be with you. But I can't-
"Bang, bang, bang", knocking at the door brought me back to the real world. My mother came in with milk and saw me fall asleep at my desk. I can't help but say with sadness, "I'm tired of studying. Let's have a rest." I agreed absently, and at the moment my mother turned away, I suddenly found out how much my mother's figure looked like you in my dream! At this time, my grandmother came into my room lightly and said to me, "Don't study bad, go out and play for a while!" " "Then I cleaned the room and took out the dirty clothes when I left. At this time, I suddenly felt that my grandmother's figure was like a dreamer! I was confused and shook my head hard to make my thoughts clear. " Xiao A, your phone! "My father was repairing the repeater for me in the living room and shouted at me through the door of the room. I hurried to answer the phone. Oh, it's the teacher. " AA, although the research exam is not ideal, don't be discouraged. As long as you carefully analyze the reasons and prescribe the right medicine, I believe you will get good grades in the next mock exam. Come on! "I nodded like garlic. I seem to have heard such encouraging words somewhere. Oh, in my dream! After hanging up the phone, my father, who was playing the repeater, looked up and said earnestly, "Little boy, you see that people around you are very concerned about you. You should be conscious. "I like to wake up!
I went back to my room thoughtfully and sat down to think quietly. I finally have the answer, dream man, I found you in my life! You are my relative, teacher and friend, and you have given me endless care, encouragement and help! Your love, trust and expectation are my motivation. I'm really happy with you.
Comments by famous teachers:
There are three reasons for the high score of this excellent examination room:
First, the idea is ingenious and innovative. In the article, the author skillfully expands the "you" in the title, not only referring to a single person, but to all the people around him who care about, encourage and help it, from point to point, with profound implications.
Second, the idea is clever, and the combination of reality and reality. The things written in this article are very general, but the little author carefully conceived at the beginning, set suspense in the form of dreams, and pointed out the topic; The combination of reality and reality in the middle part of the subject contrasts the characters in real life with the dreamer one by one, effectively confirming the feeling in the dream, which is very clever. Point out the center at the end and express your gratitude.
Third, describing characters has its own modality. The article describes the mother, grandmother, father and teacher who care about me. Their expressions in the author's works are all modal. Mother's tenderness, grandmother's diligence, teacher's encouragement and father's inspiration all conform to the identity of the characters and organically form a picture of love life.