1, from the action in, also follow the action out-
The three elements of a scene are environment, action and dialogue, which can enhance the fluency of the scene.
Counterexample:
The next day is law class. (narrator)
Although it is the first time to meet the teaching assistant of array law class, XXX is no stranger.
Because among the new disciples, Cheng Yue is the most well-informed, and this is the source of the news. Cheng Yue's brother is a mountain, five big and three thick. He is tall and big.
The course of array method begins with the basic knowledge.
...... (omitted in the middle)
XXX is rubbing his brow and making up his mind-
The array method is not my wish, and the soil cannot be bullied.
But for extraordinary reasons, Fu Jianli strives for the best! (psychological activity)
The array course is followed by the beast course. (Rigid transition)
Modify:
The next day, a master elder brother taught his disciples the basics of array. (action)
It is worth mentioning that this brother is the well-informed source of Cheng Yue and his own brother Cheng Shan.
It is not difficult to have eight basic orientations: dry, Kun, look, reason, truth, training, root and right.
......
In the end, XXX stood quietly by the river, watching the ripples spread and flow in the same direction, and the dizziness in his mind suddenly disappeared a lot.
"array method is the way to gather people!"
He sighed and made up his mind-
Give up the array and concentrate on practicing magic and sword! (Psychology+Action, including macro information)
Unfortunately, there is only one class in Jinshui Line 2 once a week, and the next day is the spirit and beast class. (connecting the preceding with the following)
Cheng Mo, a teaching assistant, took his disciples to Wanshou Peak after eating the purple gas of the morning glow. (Follow the actions after the transition)
2. The messy scene switching is called a running account-
Counter-example: XXX sighed and realized this before he walked to a high platform standing in the open air with others.
..... (omit three thousand words in the middle)
If this is a golden finger crossing the line, even if I don't die of laughter, I will be ashamed to live!
With this in mind, he casually moved his wrist, ready to try again when no one was around.
After the banquet, XXX and his disciples went to the library lobby to go through the necessary procedures for getting started ..... (regardless of the scene changes felt by readers).
Reader: ... isn't it to test why Goldfinger (the protagonist takes the main line) runs along the time axis? Who wants to see the protagonist take the side line?
Modify 1)
If this is a golden finger crossing the line, even if I don't die of laughter, I will be ashamed to live!
With this in mind, he casually moved his wrist, ready to try again when no one was around.
......
The opportunity to test the golden finger will come soon. Two nights later, when XXX was ready to rest, his spirit was touched, so he stepped out and secretly followed XX for three miles to a dense grove.
Before the scene of the hymn is switched, there is suspense to arouse the reader's interest, and then the scene will not be chaotic.
Amendment 2)
If this is a golden finger crossing the line, even if I don't die of laughter, I will be ashamed to live!
With this in mind, he casually moved his wrist, talked and laughed with his disciples, and met many classmates-
Cheng Gang, Cheng Qiang, Cheng Yue and Cheng Quan. ......
After the banquet, XXX and his disciples went to the library hall to go through the necessary formalities for getting started.
Reader: Who needs to know these names to make ghosts remember so many X's?
Hymns When the library hall is a necessary scene, readers can breathe a sigh of relief by hiding the clues of the protagonist taking the main line and ending the scene with something that readers don't like to see.
3. Scene merging can increase information density.
Too little information will make the article look watery, like a running account. The fusion of two or more scenes can speed up the story rhythm and effectively solve this problem.
4. Beware of dialogue traps and avoid asking and answering questions.
Example:
Charlotte: Grandpa, does Ma Dongmei live here?
Grandpa: What? Ma what Mei?
Charlotte: Ma Dongmei!
Grandpa: What winter plum?
Charlotte: Ma Dongmei!
Grandpa: Ma Dong what?
Charlotte: ......
If it is for fun, you can ask and answer, but if it is a dialogue that explains information, please avoid asking and answering, and extract the information and stuff it into the environment and action.
Meaningless environmental description:
Zhang San opened his eyes and found himself in a classroom.
The classroom is empty, he is the only one, and the lights are dim, which is particularly gloomy.
The doors and windows were closed, and several names were written on the blackboard. ......
Description of the environment containing information:
Zhang San opened his eyes and saw several names, including his name, written on the blackboard with red chalk and a big X in the empty classroom.
He tightened his face and went to the window to look at the sky. It's night outside and the window can't be opened.
Leaving the windowsill, I ran to the door of the classroom. Zhang San tugged hard, but the door did not move and was locked!
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