1. It's a midsummer morning. I went downstairs for a walk and met my former good friend Wu Wenbin. We haven't seen each other for a long time, and we had a good chat as soon as we met. Chatting, he suddenly asked me; "Mao Mao, how many push-ups can you do?" I shook my head and said, "I don't know." Before I finished, he got up on the ground and said, "I can do more than 20 things." You must do more than me. " Soon after he finished speaking, he stood up and said, "One * * * has made 25, so try it." I have no choice but to bite the bullet and do it. You know, I'm not good at sports because I'm too fat. I squatted on the ground, did less than five, and tried my best to be defeated. Wu Wenbin saw it and said, "I didn't expect you to make five. I think you are great. " ! "Hearing this, I blush to the neck. If there is a crack in the ground, I would like to drill it out, but it is impossible.
When I got home, I lay in bed, tossing and turning, unable to sleep. I thought to myself, he can do 25, why can't I? Am I dumber than him? No, you can't! I am by no means more stupid than him, but I practice less than him. Yes, I must try to temper and surpass him. So from that day on, I made up my mind to do five push-ups every day. Two days a day, with the increase of days, gradually, gradually, I can do more than 30 in one breath. After a period of hard work, I can do more than 40.
A year passed quickly, and on a midsummer night, I saw Wu Wenbin again in the same place. I started by offering to compete in push-ups. Whether he is on the high mountain is allowed. He did it first, or he did 25. After he finished, he looked at me with ecstasy, as if to say to me with a smile, can you do so much? Now it's my turn. I think of that night a year ago and the price I paid for my efforts. I can't help it Suddenly, generate made 50 at a time with an unknown force. When I finished, I found that Wu Wenbin was stupid. It was a long time before he came to his senses and stupidly asked me, "How can you be so great?" I smiled and replied, "I have to thank you." If you hadn't shaken my strong heart, how could I have trained so hard to surpass you? ""Oh, I see ... "He said with a wry smile.
Comments:
This composition successfully uses the description of psychological activities. For example, after losing face by doing push-ups for the first time, "Go home, ... surpass him." These descriptions of psychological activities truly and vividly describe the process of young writers "going home" and "tossing and turning in bed" and finally deciding to "try to temper and surpass him". It fully shows the center of the article-"I am a strong person". When the article describes the rematch one year later, there is such a psychological activity description. Although it only needs two sentences: "I remember ...
Although there are not many mental activities in this paper, they are used properly, vividly highlighting the temperament characteristics of the characters: being strong and making the characters abstract and full.
I want to have a home.
The intermittent rain is still falling.
The wind is whistling and still blowing.
Between heaven and earth, water mist overflows and is boundless. On this muddy path, I am still the only group, wandering aimlessly like a rudderless boat on the vast sea.
Wet, I've been fighting. Lonely vilen, except this apricot tree, can't even find a shelter from the rain. Where should I go?
Suddenly, a small bud, torn by the wind, reluctantly separated from the branch, with endless nostalgia.
My heart is not a quiver, busy hands, firmly hugged the petite body. This little bud withered prematurely before it could bloom the brilliance of life.
Holding this long-lost life silently, I feel lost, and she also holds my hand tightly, and who can warm who with this clenched hand?
We have different sorrows and pains.
Dad has completely abandoned me.
Home has become a strange concept. Home, like a ferry, carried me 16 spring and autumn, and abandoned me before reaching this shore.
At this moment, I know I have an unforgettable attachment to that purgatory-like home.
However, nothing can be done now, just like this bud, which weaves many beautiful dreams in the branches and disappears in a blink of an eye. Everything, as long as it is left to memory and hate.
Six years ago, that afternoon was as rainy as tomorrow. I don't know why, my mother left this home forever and went to a place I still don't know. I clearly remember my mother's tears of resentment.
Mom hasn't left for a few days, and there is an old and beautiful woman at home.
From that day on, washing and cooking are all mine. Even if it is a cup of mouthwash, the woman asked me to bring it to her. If I am not careful, I will be punished for nothing, no food and no school. But as long as I can go to school, what do I ask?
Tomorrow in the middle of the night, many people will come to celebrate the birthday of her five-year-old son. Only my group will hide under the covers and quietly eat cold steamed bread as usual.
Prosperity is theirs, and cold is mine. After the banquet, the boy I brought up with one hand asked me to ride for him again, saying that I'm afraid I can't ride now because his grandfather will take him to a big city far away tomorrow.
In front of everyone, I am a 16-year-old girl who can't lean forward and is used to supporting the ground with her hands. But after carrying him twice, I couldn't help crying and deliberately threw him up. Unexpectedly, this was a disaster.
She scolded me for losing face, even my brother couldn't meet a small threshold. Then, as usual, she and her father grabbed my hand, and she rudely pulled my hair and touched the door.
The owner can't convince them.
They didn't stop until their clean clothes were stained with blood. ,
They insisted that I go out and ask me to find my mother. All the begging was a drop in the bucket.
I miss my mother very much, but where is she? In this way, I was thrown like a rag.
Who dares to take me in? Dad is amazing.
I don't know where I can go or where I should go.
Bud, my only companion, can you inform me?
Some people say that "sixteen-year-old flowers only bloom once", but I don't even have a chance, although it is spring now.
"... I want a home, a center that doesn't need too much ..."
Whose tape recorder rings faintly in the distance,
Can people who listen to music be like me? Where is my home?
With a tremor, a magpie flew into the bird's nest on the treetop.
With endless envy, I just looked at it.
In the distance, there are many familiar calls. I know, that's a lot of aunts asking their children to eat.
It's good to have a mother and a family, I thought sourly.
How kind and warm that simple call is.
I waited for a long time, but no one called me. At this time, if someone can call me, I will definitely jump into her arms and call her "mom". Even if the call is extremely weak, even if only I can hear it.
May I? May I? ……
My hometown, my companions, my classmates and my teachers, are we going to forget them forever?
The wind is still blowing; Rain, it's still raining.
Rainy night came to me. ...
Only that vague song is still singing: "I want to have a home, I want to have a home ..."
Comments:
This article, a description of minor mental activities, should be said to be quite successful. It combines the description of environment, things, etc. Have mental activity. In a sad environment, a group's lonely and helpless mentality will be more incisive. At the same time, we also noticed that in the article, the little author introduced some things like "flower bud" and "magpie" in his description of mental activities. At this time, these ordinary things once covered up the feelings of the little author outside.
In addition, students will also notice that the paragraphs in this article are quite urgent. It should be said that this was deliberately designed by young authors, or that it reached a demand effect, that is, under such a lonely and sad state of mind, psychological activities must be fragmented, discontinuous and emotional. Therefore, such a short paragraph can show such a state of mind!
In a word, such a successful composition describing psychological activities is of great significance for us to learn how to stop describing human psychological activities.
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Once in an ideological and moral class, Mr. Wang told us to develop good rest habits. The teacher said earnestly, "people who don't like to rest are called lazy." Lazy people are people who are not motivated. " She then asked her classmates, will they do housework at home? I don't know why, I'm so nervous that I pound my head for fear that the teacher will hit me. Think about it, I am the captain, and I can rest at school, but what did I do at home? Mom didn't do anything? It's ridiculous not to wash your handkerchief yourself.
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1. The character's mind describes the complex emotions of people who can write the character's mood, emotions, etc. For example, it says, "I don't know why, but I'm so nervous that I'm afraid the teacher will hit me on the head." The reason for this nervousness lies in the fact that the little author doesn't do housework and is lazy. These descriptions of the characters' moods accurately and meticulously show the inner world of the characters.
2. The description of the character's mind can write the character's thoughts. For example, "think about it, I am the captain and can rest at school, but what have I done at home?" Mom didn't do anything? It's outrageous that I don't even start washing my handkerchief. "This passage is written by the little author's inner thoughts and blames himself for being lazy.
3. To write bad characters' moods and thoughts, it is necessary to deepen the examination and find out the inner world of the characters. We should be good at seeing what kind of emotional waves and thoughts are surging in the inner world of the characters in key situations, and try our best to describe the mind carefully and accurately.
The language description of psychological activities and emotional expression is the characteristic of Chinese. Chinese words related to psychological activities include: heart, thinking, worry, sadness, fear, anger, hesitation, taboo, suspense, bitterness, attitude, benefit, punishment, kindness, emotion, intelligence, rest, leisure, will, forgetfulness, suddenness, impatience, forbearance, resentment, anger and laziness. Pregnancy, timidity, shyness, embarrassment, fear, sympathy, pity, busyness, anxiety, panic, trance, sadness, anger, sympathy, fear, pain, shame, repentance, regret, hatred, happiness, laziness, fatigue, kindness ... Carefully distinguish and study.