Some people say the examination room is like a battlefield. I said that the examination room is like a market. Candidates' writing level is high or low, and raters are no longer evaluated by teachers and teachers familiar with our school, nor can they count candidates' past honors and glories. The current online marking basically excludes the influence of human factors on marking, which is fair and objective for candidates. In such a "market-oriented" operation, candidates should fully understand the changes and requirements of the "market" in order to write a composition that meets the requirements of the examination room and can get high marks. It is an urgent task for senior three students to adapt to the scoring rules of composition in the examination room and improve their writing realm.
First, the marking speed is fast, and deduction is the lifeline.
In 2009, the unit time for marking each composition in senior three is about 60 seconds, and more importantly, each composition is only about 20 seconds. The demand of "examinee 12 years unremitting efforts, examiner 90 seconds" has also been ignored because of the special "marketization" of examination marking.
Whether it is the pure propositional composition in the past, the material composition and topic composition in previous years, or the fashionable new material composition (no topic composition) and composite composition proposition (composition proposition form with introduction and proposition), there are certain requirements for the meaning of the topic, so this is the first concern of the teacher when marking, that is to say, the marking teacher first judges whether your composition is off topic, and if the marking teacher thinks it is off topic or suspected of being off topic, it is generally.
Look at the topic of single-mode composition in Nanjing in 2009. Try to talk about deduction from several aspects.
"Out of line" means different, different; It can also be explained as being unconventional and doing too much.
Please write an article of no less than 800 words on the topic of "out of line", with your own perspective and opinions, and the style is not limited except poetry.
1, the topic fits the meaning of the topic.
There are many requirements for the proposed topic, the key is to be specific and concise, and the most important thing is to conform to the meaning of the topic, so that the marking teacher can see at a glance that you understand the meaning of the topic at first sight.
This topic is proposition composition. Candidates must first explain the meaning of the topic and make a correct interpretation, and have established their own topic center. Get out, go beyond, get out, get out. "Grid", specification, format, pattern and style. To be out of line is to create a unique style. The given topic itself should be pondered over and over again, and it should not be less than the rest. Sort out "what is extraordinary, why is extraordinary, and how is extraordinary", and then establish your own writing focus. For example, some students grasp "paramore is different" and talk about the importance of diligence to paramore. Some students grasp "paramore is different" and say that only by perseverance can they become "out of line" talents. It can be said that it is a thousand miles away. No matter what kind of proposition it is, it is very important to understand the meaning of the question. Practice more at ordinary times and grasp the critical vision of the meaning of the question.
Step 2 Ask questions quickly at the beginning
There are many methods at the beginning, but no matter which one is adopted, we should quickly get to the point and make clear our attitude. Especially when discussing articles, don't be tedious; Or vague, mystifying. Try to see the excellent beginning of the composition in the Nanjing Model Examination in 2009.
For example 1, you will be grateful when the flowers bloom; The full moon will be very short; When the clouds get thicker, it will rain; When the water thickens, it will overflow. I think everything has its limits. If it is out of line, it will be too much.
Example 2, the purples on the wall are the exception of apricot flowers, which are impartial, unpretentious and not enchanting. This beauty is really good. The eagle can only fight the sky if it crosses the hill in the gully; Carps can only leap over the Longmen if they keep sprinting through the gurgling water; Human beings must get out of the bound circle in order to get successful applause.
Don't forget the last question
Whether it is argumentative or narrative, the theme should be revealed at the end of the article, or echoed or sublimated. Don't be flashy and mystifying.
Don't forget to ask questions in the middle.
Many students think that there are punctuation marks at the beginning and the end, and generally there will be no digression. Although there is nothing wrong with this understanding, it ignores the actual situation of marking. It is best to present leading sentences, turning sentences, summarizing sentences, etc. Write in the middle, which will give people the impression that the marking teacher is closely related to the topic and fits the meaning of the topic.
Please look at the composition that was well received in the examination room.
very good
Tao Yiyue, Senior Three, Nanjing Foreign Language School
When you go to Qiu Lai in spring, flowers bloom and fall, and the operation of nature has its own rules. In this world, there are naturally rules to follow. Some of them are engraved on tablets and written on paper, which should not be violated. Some of them are unfounded and just "everyone is doing it". If they violate it, they will be condemned as "out of line". However, people who are out of line are often immortals.
Chen Qiao mutiny, yellow robe, has always been a regime change, without bloodshed, but he is different. Wearing the golden color symbolizing power, it replaced Zhou Chai's world overnight and created the century-old glory of Dasong. Arising to seize power and usurp the throne, Zhao Kuangyin ended the disputes between the Five Dynasties and Ten Countries with the biggest deviant behavior, leaving a prosperous and enlightened word "Song" in the history books. His deviance laid the foundation for the century-old prosperity of Zhao and Song Dynasties.
"I endured the floating name and changed to shallow singing." In that era of fame and fortune, there was such a strange voice. Teenagers' frivolous jokes caused great anger. "We sing in a low voice. Why should we be famous?" A critical remark shattered all the dreams of a teenager. Well, since it's out of line, it's out of line. So I was brilliant, and I walked around the street, and the beautiful words were only smiles. However, "every drinking place is full of songs and lyrics", and everyone in the streets knows the capital Liu Qi. He is a brilliant man. "Yang Liuan, the wind is going to stop." How many talented people are ashamed! Liu Yiqing's deviance has set up a monument for several generations in the Spring and Autumn Ci.
"The sober and sages of ancient times have been forgotten, and only great drinkers can be immortalized." How unruly this is! "Since god gave talent, let it be hired! , spin one thousand silver, all back! "What kind of release is this! The white costume, a pot of wine, a poem and a sword are like an independent world. The imperial concubine pours wine, and Lux takes off his boots. Power is expensive in his eyes, but dust. He has the melancholy of "Looking up, I found it was moonlight, and then sinking back, I suddenly remembered home", the sincerity of "Peach Blossom Pond is deeper than thousands of feet, not as good as Wang Lun", and the lofty sentiments of "How can the Yellow River water move out of heaven without you?" Li Taibai's unrestrained writing has written the most dazzling and chic legend for thousands of years.
What do you mean out of line? It's just a little different from ordinary people. How can it not be tolerated in the world? Being out of position is not only a display of talent, but also the realization of ambition. Being out of line is an attitude of "getting out of the mud without being stained" and a way to survive in a muddy world. For a thousand people who are out of line, there are a thousand kinds of helplessness. They are maverick and go their own way, which may not be suitable for the present, but they will certainly be passed on to future generations. But being maverick doesn't mean treating the rules like nothing. The behavior of trying to be different from others by hook or by crook can only be called "cheating". It is impossible to say forever, but it is impossible to get a little recognition.
Making a song about wine, life is geometric, but it's only a few decades. Why stick to the rules and stay in the world? You might as well be an out-of-line person. Even if you can't make great contributions and achievements like Mao and Liu Qi, you can do what Li Taibai did without hurting people or the world. You just want to be chic, so you have no regrets.
What is worth remembering is the digression of Fei Yingying's composition in 2003. Let's review the composition of the 2003 national college entrance examination (national volume).
Read the following text and write as required. (60 points)
There was a rich man in the state of Song. One day, the wall of his house was damaged by heavy rain. His son said, "If you don't fix it, someone will steal it." An old man next door said the same thing. At night, rich people really lost a lot of things at home. The rich man thinks his son is very clever, but he suspects that the old man next door stole it.
The above is the fable in Everything is done wrong. Until today, we can still hear similar stories in real life; However, many different or even opposite situations are also common. When we know things and deal with problems, is there a relationship between the intimacy of feelings and the depth of right and wrong cognition of things? What kind of relationship is it? Please write an article on the topic of "emotional closeness and cognition of things"
[Note] ① The content written must be within the scope of the topic. The allegorical materials quoted in the test questions can be used or not. 2 self-determination. 3 styles are optional. 4 topic self-made. ⑤ Not less than 800 words. 6. Please do not copy.
In the face of this exam, first of all, candidates must reflect the difference between relatives and friends in their compositions. If the examinee only writes "emotion and reason" and "emotion and judgment", it is inconsistent with the meaning of the question. The word "closeness" can be said to be a problem. In addition, Naoko's story of suspicious neighbors is obviously tendentious, that is, it is wrong to judge things by emotion, and the general students will deny this thinking mode caused by "emotional closeness", such as cronyism and judging everything by closeness in reality. However, we should pay attention to the sentence "However, many different or even opposite situations are common". Candidates who want to be innovative and get high marks should affirm the positive significance of "intimacy" to cognition, such as "beauty is in the eye of the lover" and guide aesthetic consciousness intimately. Although this concept is difficult, there is also a lot of evidence.
Try the following controversial article.
Human feelings and seasons
(1) Dragon Boat Festival
A few days ago, it was the Dragon Boat Festival. When I took last year's wormwood and calamus from the door and replaced them with new ones, I heard the slight cracking sound of dry vegetation and smelled a special aroma mixed with dust, which was the smell of wormwood. Artemisia argyi and Acorus calamus are two plants with special significance. Ain, with its rich aroma, is regarded as an evil spirit, while Acorus calamus with slender leaves is regarded as a sword in the hands of immortals, with a turquoise blade, which can be used to kill evil spirits. I remember when I was a child, every Dragon Boat Festival, I saw everyone coming home with tied calamus and wormwood in their bicycle baskets. Now, when I go downstairs, I see every door is empty. Will people forget what they mean? Or do you just think it's ridiculous to put them by every closed door?
(2) Lantern Festival
As usual, this year's Lantern Festival, I lit a lamp and walked around the yard. I can't see anyone lighting a lamp like me, and I'm the only one walking in the whole yard. Because of the rain, the fire was obviously extinguished, which was particularly weak. When I got home, TV said that the lantern market of Confucius Temple was deserted this year because of the rain. "Last year's Lantern Festival, the flower market was brightly lit." This is the Lantern Festival written by Ouyang Xiu. Nowadays, people prefer to stay at home, even after the Lantern Festival.
(3) Chongyang
I read a very touching story. A mother was ill, and her daughter went to the hospital to visit her. On the way, she remembered that it was Chongyang today, so she bought a cake. Cake also means climbing a mountain, which is a symbol of good luck to avoid disaster. There is a small flag on the cake, which also means to ward off evil spirits. Later, my mother got well, and the vegetable cake was always there and she didn't want to eat it. In fact, this is a small matter, but the feelings inside are touching. Such feelings also make the meaning of the festival more prominent. Let us know that the form of the festival is actually the result of strong emotional accumulation, and people's sincere wishes are the whole content of the festival.
(4) Solstice in winter,
I especially like the name of the winter solstice. Every time I meditate, my old friends come to visit me and listen to their footsteps. In ancient times, every winter solstice, the emperor would sacrifice to heaven with his ministers. On this day, ordinary people will miss their old friends and recall the past. This is a warm festival. But on this day, I went to school and asked my classmates what day it was today. Their expressions are cold. They don't care, and they don't care which day is which holiday.
I think people ignore festivals because of their indifference. But what is even more frightening is that our indifference to feelings and alienation from human feelings make us lose our ability to perceive the little things around us in life.
The final score of this article is 25 points. Fei Yingying wrote it. He won the first gold medal in the first global Chinese youth writing essay contest with the platform of articles, and the article was later included in the fifth volume of "High School Chinese Reader". At school, Fei Yingying's exam composition is equally excellent, and both mock exams are regarded as model essays by teachers.
Why did such an article get only 25 points? It is very important that the intention of this article is not intuitive and clear, and many people think it is a composition that is off topic.
Fei Yingying's sketches remind people of the fact that traditional festivals are neglected. The ancient and modern people's feelings about these festivals have obviously changed. The author is obviously frustrated with this change, because the emotional change about traditional festivals is a barometer, which records the general differences of people's cognition of things. Therefore, the author poured out her "cognition" of these festivals with deep affection, which is worthy of appreciation by every Chinese teacher. Far from all students knowing the allusions of traditional festivals in China, these are "cognitions" that many people lack or ignore. From this perspective, Fei Yingying's composition is not off topic.
Therefore, it is necessary to further study the marking of compositions in the examination room, that is, whether the marking teacher has the ability to understand his thoughts at a glance within a minute or two. This is not only the need of composition writing in the examination room, but also the need of the rapidly changing and developing times, so that the audience can obtain the most accurate and abundant information in the most economical time.
Good articles need time to chew and play carefully, but for people who work and run fast, it is impossible to change their rhythm and listen to us slowly when they are not in their spare time. We must be aware of this and express our profound and unique thinking in the most concise and vivid way, even in the general way of international academic exchanges.
In other words, the idea should not be too infinite, and the expression should not be too subtle. You should learn to adjust your own expression, so that people can quickly grasp the main idea of the article, so as to meet the needs of rapid marking, rapid social development and rapid scanning and reading at work.
Second, see if the thinking is clear.
Composition is a kind of communication, and so is the composition in the examination room. The marking time is short, with an average of no more than 2 minutes per volume. This feature of the composition in the examination room requires the marking teacher to know clearly and quickly what you want to express and how to express it. In general, the marking teacher can't spend a long time pondering an article to analyze what you wrote.
1, with prominent center.
You have made it clear what you want to express when you conceive, and remember what you are writing when you write. The central theme of the composition in the examination room is more obvious than usual. Don't be vague and unintelligible; Mysterious, too subtle.
2. Clear thinking
Or use symbolic sentences to show opinions, such as sub-arguments, or use a roughly the same or similar sentence to connect materials between paragraphs in the main body of the article to show opinions.
Or use parallel segments to show ideas. In addition to the beginning and end, the main body of the article uses parallel paragraphs, which can also make the idea of the article clear and rigorous.
Or contrast, or hierarchical, or use subtitles, the purpose is to show ideas, so that marking teachers can see at a glance. Don't be confused and inconsistent.
Please look at a high-scoring composition that was well received in the examination room.
Out-of-line senior three candidates
"This woman is not human," Tang Bohu wrote on an old woman's birthday. Everyone was shocked, and the old woman's son was even more angry. However, I saw him slowly write a couplet: "Nine fairies descend to earth." Everyone was overjoyed and even called it wonderful. Tang Bohu's ingenious couplets won everyone's appreciation. Don't we need something out of line? Life is colorful because it is out of line. Doing something extraordinary in ordinary life can not only show your talent and personality, but also add interest.
Especially true and false, like an unexpected stroke in the picture scroll of life, some paintings are suddenly born because of this artistic conception, which makes people admire. Some of them are out of place and difficult to coordinate, which has become an obvious failure in carefully conceived works. Celebrities in Wei and Jin dynasties are good at talking about metaphysics and reasoning, and they are unrestrained and blindly show their detachment, which is not beneficial to the country; Self-protection, as Wang Bo said: "Ruan Ji is rampant, and it is useless to cry at the end of the road." What is really out of line has made great contributions to mankind. Just like Newton, when an apple hit his head, his wisdom was bold and out of line. He linked the apple with the moon, proved the law of universal gravitation and initiated classical physics. It can be seen that the real abnormality is not affectation, deliberately showing transcendence, but discovering and creating anomalies that ordinary people have never thought of, and showing superhuman talent when making beneficial contributions to others.
It's really extraordinary to have accidental factors. This is Tang Bohu's chance to celebrate people's birthdays. This is an apple that falls on Newton's head. Kekule discovered the structure of benzene ring in his dream, which solved the long-standing problem. These famous and outrageous things are all due to the care of opportunities. However, there are also distressing factors in the accident. Su Shi's fate was bumpy and he was repeatedly relegated, and his ambition could not be realized. In adversity, he expressed his feelings for mountains and rivers, calmly understood the philosophy of life and nature, and left countless masterpieces and amazing talents in the extraordinary. Out-of-bounds accidents are actually very common As long as we change our perspective, have a keen awareness, seize opportunities in time, and regard setbacks and failures as excellent opportunities, we may have more out-of-line things and show ourselves incisively and vividly.
Really out of line is inevitable. Just think, if Newton doesn't have a profound scientific foundation and a strong research spirit, what's the use of having more opportunities to come to him? Li Bai was uninhibited, experienced ups and downs, enjoyed the scenery of famous mountains and rivers, and left countless masterpieces. However, if he didn't study hard in the mountains in his early years, he was familiar with historical classics, and faced with the beautiful scenery of "putting pen to paper, making poetry cry", how could he be so excited about poetry? We need to work harder if we want to be really out of line. After all, the opportunity is hard to come by. Only by constantly honing one's will and improving one's ability can one show one's uniqueness when the opportunity comes. Hard work is an inevitable prerequisite for going out of line.
Many people want to show their excesses and win the respect and admiration of others. Then let's keep our eyes open, seize the opportunity and strive to improve our ability. When we pick up the brush and make a stroke on the long scroll of life, there will be more "finishing touches"!
The structure of the argumentation technique used by the author is clearly shown to the reader. Mr. Huang Yufeng, a special teacher in Shanghai, once said that a competent composition writer in the examination room should be a good guide for readers (reviewers). This student can get high marks, which shows that he is a good guide.
Third, see if your expression is accurate and wonderful.
There is no doubt about the importance of wonderful language expression, but most students, especially those with relatively average level, should first consider the accuracy of expression. In other words, you should write in plain language as much as possible. Instead of the situation that the words and expressions in the composition affect the marking teacher's impression of your composition, and instead of the situation that the marking teacher has false feelings for your composition because of the pursuit of so-called language beauty, it is better to express honestly and keep the words in order.
Of course, on the basis of accurate expression, we can also consider wonderful expression.
Or use figures of speech flexibly, or skillfully use text sentences, or skillfully quote famous poems, or make good use of lyrics.
For example, at the beginning of this model essay writing, a classmate caught the reader's attention because of his outstanding literary talent.
It is a weed that comes out early in the garden in spring, and a brisk person will uproot it; Especially the proud butterfly is frivolous, and the mantis after mosaic will attack it and kill it; Especially the tigers that dominate in the forest are arrogant, and the traps set by hunters in the grass are cleverly captured. Man, if you go out of line, you may fall into the abyss of perdition in arrogance.
Finally, I would like to remind you that if you want the marking teacher to give you high marks, it depends on whether your articles are novel, such as whether the ideas are novel, whether the materials are fresh, whether the ideas are clever, whether the styles are unique and so on. However, in writing a composition in the examination room, we should give full play to our true level and show what we usually train, especially to practice solid basic skills, instead of using the composition examination room of the college entrance examination as a test field for innovation and risk. Therefore, it is very important to train at ordinary times, so that no matter how the situation changes in the examination room, you can face it calmly and win the game.